战胜六级：
Nov.27st,2004
Dear Mr Annan,
I'm a university student in China. I am glad to write to you to show my opinion on the world peace.
Peace and Development are the two themes of the world nowadays.Hundreds of countries and millions of people are working hard on it. And now most of countries in the world are trying their best to keep the peace of the world ,including developed and developing countries. I think there are billions of people dreaming of living in a peaceful world. But as I know,violence is still exist.For example ,many terrorists are trying to destroy the world peace.Powerful countries as USA are inclined to be aggressive. And serious conflicts happen in African frequently. But I believe these incidents are minority,the majority of people are eager for peace.
So I hope the UN can take some measures to protect the world peace. I hope more laws and contracts about peace to be drawn up,less terror incidents to happen. I hope there are less wars in the world and people in every country enjoy their lives in peace.
Best wishes!
Yours,
wcq
错误：
1. now most of countries in the world / now most of the countries in the world
2. But as I know,violence is still exist. / violence still exists
3. Powerful countries as USA / Powerful countries like USA
4. I believe these incidents are minority / I believe these incidents are not representative.
小羽：
Dear Mr. Annan,
I am now writing to you to express my person opinion about the Internal Day of Peace which galls on September 21st, 2004.
As you said at the Millennium Summit, the United Nations should function as the leader in the intervention against war, diseases and poverty, I believe what you said is right. Currently the worsening situation in the Middle East is worrying not only me, but all the people in the world. The American government has sent its troops to occupy Iraq and even worse, some American soldier maltreated the Iraq prisoners in jail, which is seriously violating the international law. The Bush administration always advocates human rights movement, but the Iraqi situation is a very good example to let the world know clearly what the American government is aiming at. September 21st, 2004 is the International Day of Peace. I firmly believe that any body in the world, black, white or yellow, must surely I love peace and fight against wars.
I sincerely hope that the United Nations, under your guidance, will lead the world on its way to peace so that the people all over the world shall live in peace and harmony.
Yours cordially,
错误： 写的非常好！
1. some American soldier maltreated the Iraq prisoners in jail / some American soldiers maltreated the Iraqi prisoners
苜儿：
Dear Mr. Kofi Annan,
Thank you for reading this letter in the midst of pressing affairs! I’m a college student from China. I have paying close attention to the world peace, especially recently.
History lets us know, the war made great influence to a country, even the world . It not only influence people's stable life but politics and economy of a country, makes the society in turmoil. We object to the war and recommend the peace. We unwilling to see that solve the dispute with the military force, and hope that the world is full of love. The world peace is an eternal topic. Everybody is looking forward to a really peaceful day.
Please pay more attentions and measures to solve the problem that still exist at present. I believe , the world will be more beautiful tomorrow !
Yours,
Muer
错误：
1. I have paying close attention to the world peace, especially recently. / I have been paying…..
2. History lets us know, the war made great influence to a country, even the world / Historically, the war has great influence on a country,…..
3. It not only influence / influences
4. We unwilling to see that solve the dispute with the military force, / We are unwilling to see that the dispute is solved with……
5. Please pay more attentions and measures to solve the problem / Please pay more attention and take more measures to solve the problem
6. the world will be more beautiful tomorrow ! / the world will have a more beautiful tomorrow !
