2010年6月大学英语四六级考试写作全面解读(4)

　　【范文二】

　　Recreational Activities

　　In people’s daily life, (1) there are various recreational activities (2) apart from studying or working (3) ranging from Karaoke or dancing to computer games or sports games. Such activities are beneficial as well as harmful to us if undertaken inappropriately. (4)As far as I’m concerned, we should pay more attention to the advantages of various recreational activities

　　(5) For one thing, those recreational activities are great and necessary, because they can help people relax from the hard work and study. Some of the activities, such as hiking, jogging, can help people relax physically; while some of them, such as surfing the Internet, can help people relax mentally. For another, it can improve our communication skills because most of these activities are done with others.

　　(6) However, if we spend too much time on singing, dancing or other games, we might fail to concentrate on our duties such as studying our working, which in turn may lead to further consequences. Therefore, recreational activities should be done within a certain limit so that we can keep a proper balance between recreation and studying or working life.

　　【点 评】

　　(1) 引出现象，直击主题

　　(2) apart from “除了”

　　(3) 使用ranging from列举娱乐活动，呼应主题(多种多样)。现在分词作定语

　　(4) 使用As far as I’m concerned引出自己的观点

　　(5)例举娱乐活动的益处

　　(6) 使用转折词however话锋一转，谈及例举娱乐活动的益处

　　(7)亮点词汇 concentrate on，in turn，lead to further consequences，keep a proper balance，为文章添彩。