2013年6月大学英语四级考试作文高分版点评
The Big is the Little
Nothing can be done except little by little, the French poet Baudelaire Charles once said. Most people, however, often ignore such a truth. So does the little boy shown in the picture. He expresses his worries to his father about disposing of nuclear waste, but is told that he can achieve nothing if he doesn’t empty the dustbin first.
Every single little thing you can do today matters. The truth has been tested for ages, and thousands of great people have set good examples for us. For instance, Leonardo da Vinci, the world-renowned master in painting, starts his career with repeated egg-drawing. Lu Xun, the great man of letters, reminded himself to get up early by inscribing the character “morning” on his desk.
As university students, in my opinion, we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. All in all, only those who have the patience to do simple things perfectly will acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.
【点评】
本次四级作文为看图作文,探讨的话题是“一屋不扫,何以扫天下”。这个话题较为常见,一般考生对此都比较熟悉,所以对考生来说难度不大。一篇好的四级作文,要注意两点:一,要紧扣题目要求;二,要在评论的基础上亮出自己的观点。
范文开头第一句就开门见山,引用名言,亮出观点,简短而有力。紧接着又用图片中所给的故事,作为论据支撑。这样以来,既避免了直接叙述故事带来的突兀感,又使故事更好的支持论点。
第二段作者进一步分析深入论证自己观点。通过中外两个“从小事做起的”伟人的例子做论证,使论点更为饱满,更具说服力。
第三段作者从自身出发,指出大学生对“一屋不扫”应该具备积极的态度。文章最后,以名言作结,切中主题,铿锵有力。
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