小作文

　　五档，9分

　　Dear editor,

　　I'm a sincere reader of your newspaper and I like your discussion of the social problems. Now I want to give some opinions of myself about the "White Pollution"

　　As we know, regulation was made to solve the problem in June 1st of 2008. The use of plastic bags was restricted in the supermarket and many other shops freely. At the beginning, it was carried on well, but now I found plastic bags were used in some small shops for free or with no pay.

　　I am writing to tell you that we should solve this problem soon with the help of your newspaper. You could make some investigators about it and write some reports of it, so as to appeal to all the people’s attentions of our society.

　　Sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　本文很好地完成了试题规定的任务，与目标读者完全产生了预期的效果：

　　1.内容包含了所有的内容要点，该文第一段的内容更吻合题目的要求。

　　2.所使用的语法结构和词汇比较丰富。

　　3.语言比较自然流畅，尽管存在个别的语法(例如，时态)和用词错误。

　　4.有效使用了各种衔接手段，层次清晰，组织也比较严密。

　　5.格式与语域恰当贴切。

　　四档，7-8分

　　Dear Editor Wang,

　　I am a senior student living in Beijing. Being a citizen in our capital, I care a lot about our environment. But, although the law of not using plastic bags had been enforced since June, the effect is not very good. I am afraid 'White Pollution" will still exist for a long time.

　　I believe there are ways to improve the situation. Our communities could offer bags free, which will substitute plastic bags. Meanwhile, some education on environment and White pollution should be held to local people. Besides the above two, much more can be done. I hope you would consider it carefully.

　　Yours truly

　　Li Ming

　　较好地完成了试题规定的任务，基本能够对目标读者产生预期的效果：

　　1. 包含了所有的内容要点，既简要介绍了自己的观点，又提出了具体的建议。

　　2. 所使用的句子结构和词汇相对比较丰富，例如：Being a citizen in……, I care……等。

　　3. 语言基本正确，当然也存在着一些语法错误和用词的错误，但是并不会严重影响意义的表达。

　　4. 采用了适当的衔接手段，例如, but, meanwhile, besides等，层次也比较清晰。

　　5. 格式和语域比较恰当。

　　三档，5-6分

　　To whom it may concern:

　　As a student of a university, I want to take this opportunity to express some points about "White Pollution".

　　There is no denying that plastic is destroy our environment is we use it excessively. So the government take some means to deal with it. Restrict to use the plastic bags in whole country. But it didn't get successful as we predict. The "White Pollution" is still around our environment in some regions.

　　Takes measures is needed. I want to take some recommends. First and formost, more strength restriction is needed by pollution education. Second, media should spread more information concern. Only in this way can we curb the statement. I'm looking forward your reply.

　　Sincerely yours

　　Liming

　　基本完成了试题规定的任务，对目标读者基本产生了预期的效果：

　　1. 内容包含试题所要求的两个要点，没有跑题。

　　2. 具有较多的用词与语法错误，但是读者仍然能够大致领会作者想要表达的意思。

　　3. 采用了一些简单的衔接手段，内容还算连贯，层次也算清楚。

　　4. 格式和语域基本合理。

　　二档，3-4分

　　I am very sorry to trouble with you. But this is a problem annoying with me. It is White Pollution. With the economic growth widely, white pollution become more and more serious. It is harmonious between the men and nature. White pollution destroy some special. More and more similar issue can be read today in newspaper as well as in magazine.

　　The problem can be solved in some ways. First, attitude is everything. We must make people aware of this issue. Second, we must change with ourself. It's essential that we address our problem before looking to others change. Finally, the acts of pollution must be punishment.

　　I'm looking forward to your reply!

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　未能按照要求完成试题规定的任务，不能清楚地将信息传达给读者。

　　1.第一段落的内容离题太远，未能很好地表达题目的第一个内容要点。

　　2.语法和用词错误太多，表明作者缺乏基本的英语语法知识或者使用语法知识的能力。

　　3.虽然也使用了一些衔接手段，但是内容上缺乏连贯性。

　　4.格式和语域不恰当。例如，此信没有抬头。

　　一档，1-2分

　　Dear the editor

　　I'm pleasure to write the letter to you. With the development of the socity, white pollution is more and more bad. Our sky is not blue, our earth is not clean and our river is not fish.

　　To solve this question, I have some suggestions. First, every one drive their car less a day in a week than before. Second, when we are shopping, we use environment plastic bags. Third, our government do some rules. Do you thing my opinion? Look forward your reply.

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming

　　未完成试题规定的任务，不能把信息传递给读者：

　　1.文章内容基本离题，有许多不相关的内容。

　　2.作者基本不具备英语的语法常识，句子结构简单且不完整。

　　3.用词错误太多，词不达意。

　　零档 0 分

　　dear editor:

　　I am a student of Tianjing University. Recently years our country

　　所传达的信息或者所用的语言太少，内容与要求也无关系，无法评价