考试吧：2014考研英语小作文优秀范文赏析

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　8-10分

　　第一篇

　　Dear Tommy,

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.

　　If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed my law exam held for once a year.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Jane Yang

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Tommy,

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.

　　If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed(改为missing) my law exam held for once a year.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Jane Yang

　　8分

　　同学你好，作文写的很不错，但是要注意虚拟语气的用法，建议再复习一下。

　　8-10分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Eleven

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奥数是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改为giving) it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　8分

　　同学你好，这篇小作文整体来讲写的不错。建议你如果遇到某些不确定但又不是非常重要的专有名词，可以改为其他有把握的词，例如本篇作文中提到的奥数，完全可以改为其他的比赛。

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